This is my narrative about Scorpion Ninja for W8 T2 writing.
RT: To use key words about the topic in follow up sentences.
NL: To paragraph.
Beginning
Everyone thought Hyun was just an ordinary boy, but secretly he had the skills of a ninja and a venomous scorpion tail. One particular day, these strange features would come in handy.The day seemed like any typical day. Get changed, eat breakfast, brush your teeth, go to school. But this crazy mad engineer would change the day, from typical, to odd. Meanwhile back at school: The teacher was teaching how to add fractions and Hyun was super bored in class. Suddenly, they heard a loud noise. “BOOM.” Then it grew louder. “BOOM.” “BOOM.” Soon enough, the teacher looked out the window to investigate. His face went pale. The expression on his face was hard to explain. The class looked out to see a colossal robot.
Middle
The whole class was confused. Hyun knew that something fishy was going on. Who was doing this? Why were they doing this? Hyun departed to the door. He was going to get to the bottom of this. The teacher called 111 to take down this humongous robot. The police arrive in packs, some in helicopters. They are gunning the robot down but it has not affected it. The robot has a weak spot, but just where is it? Hyun is now out of school and he is trying to locate the scoundrel behind all of this. Luckily, scorpions have an excellent sense of smell. But in order for him to track him, he needs a scent. So Hyun looks around to find something that has the villain's scent. The massive robot is wreaking havoc around town. The police are buying time for Hyun, enough time for him to find goggles. Hyun can’t tell if it is the villain’s goggles, but it's worth a shot.
End
He follows the scent, across the street, around the block, into the prak, and into an alleyway. It leads to a wall. Hyun is confused. He knocks on the bricks and you guessed it, a hidden door opens. He enters, and sees a 5’4 tall man wearing overalls, and goggles, looking at a screen. On the screen was the perspective of the enormous robot. On his desk were presumably controls for the robot. Hyun threw kunais and shurikens at the criminal, hitting the sleeves and pinning him against the wall. He pointed his scorpion tail at the criminal and interrogated him. “Why are you doing this!?” Hyun shouted. We’ll just call the criminal Guy for now. Guy responded with “I don't know.” Hyun replied “Ok, fair enough, now tell me how to deactivate the robot.” “Just press that button.” Guy said. Hyun pressed it. Soon all the noise in the background faded. Hyun alerted authorities, and they sentenced Guy to life in jail. The reason for this was because the massive robot caused $1,000,000,000 worth of damage.
Hello Nicholas This is a good story and has loads of words in that story and i like how your character looks like
ReplyDeleteGood