I am a Year 5 student at PCS School in Auckland, NZ. I am in KHH and my teachers are Whaea Tamzin and Whaea Sharlee . This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first draft. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
I don't like chocolate. I love it! The first few lines of your narrative had me hooked in. I needed to know what was outside and why everyone was screaming. The character was brave to take the chocolate monster. What happened after the grumble!?
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I don't like chocolate. I love it! The first few lines of your narrative had me hooked in. I needed to know what was outside and why everyone was screaming. The character was brave to take the chocolate monster. What happened after the grumble!?
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